Revised completed paper

Hello I need help with a paper that has already been write. I have attached the preparation and information word documents to help understand what the paper was about. Also the grading tool any where you see basic it where the comment are needs to fix so I can be graded at proficient or distinguished.

NHS-FP6004_MillsSamantha_Assessment- this the paper with comments of things that need to be change. Please use this one to make the changes and attach this when completed. Please highlight your changes.

Please let me know if you need help.